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Comments on Damsels in Distress Stories

March 13, 2017
Posted at 11:49 pm
 

Chaos Calls: Learning Visit - The opening does give away a bit of what's to happen in Finding Home as it's the end of Finding Home. That's there to set Al's character up in Chaos without having to make a new one.

Release of Prisoners: In the section where the main camp is attacked, after the attack Al and Joe are speaking to Colonel Bond, the next paragraph mentions the teens get down from their positions and release the prisoners. They help clean up the site.

Return Home: I mention the travel home is faster than the travel through the forest. I say that as when they bypassed Bridgetown and worked their slow way to the enemy camp they travelled in the forest amongst the scrub and trees, making their way with great care and working hard not to leave a trail while scouting ahead before moving. On the return trip they travel on the road that goes through the forest, that's open and no scrub in the way, making for a faster trip. The return trip has a lot less in the way of natural obstructions and makes for easier movement.

Chaos Calls: First Rescue - Up North, I've had a few people say that US citizens would use the term Back East when talking about going from New Mexico to Frederick. One editor raised this, so I do have the US CITIZENS use that term; but Al is an Aussie and would never say it that way, to him it would be 'up north' as a purely descriptive term, and the same for Eduardo as he's a Mexican. So, please, no more emails about Al saying up north.

Chaos Calls: Dragon Dilemma - Bearings, the bearings I use are steel roller or needle bearings in a steel race - not ball bearings. These can be cast metal. Bearings will never be common on Chaos, it's metal poor, as the metal bearings of the wagons are worth a lot. A rich person like Al can afford them for a special project.

A troop is a basic military unit and has varied a lot between countries, forces, and time periods. The earliest use of the term was for an organised group of warriors on foot. Today, more people are used to a cavalry troop. In more modern usage it varies between being the equivalent of a platoon or a company and has varied in size from around 30 to 70 members. On Chaos Al is setting up a troop to be the equal of a platoon, but with 65 members as that's what he sees as a reasonable sized force to safely act on its own. In older times military units had larger numbers than they do today - think pre gunpowder period, please.

The carts I mention are something like a dog cart modified for use by a horse, they are only as wide as an average horse. Here's an image of roughly what they look like in real life:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Dogcart3.jpg

Story Comments

March 13, 2017
Posted at 11:47 pm
 

All stories are also available as a single file at:

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/ernestbywater

Survivor:

Oil: Yes, oil is sold by the barrel, but when you're explaining something like that to a ten year old you tend to adjust the terms to ones you know they'll understand, thus Sarge speaks of a low 'per gallon' rate, instead of going into a long talk on barrels of oil.

Weapons: I've not mentioned any weapons they have when Pat arrives, other than the Bond Arms Snake Slayers and the M9 Beretta, then they buy a .22 Long Rifle and some replica M1 .30 calibre carbines. I'm asked why they don't use M16s and the like. Simple, they want Pat to be able to use them too. Most US military rifles have an energy level of over 2,000 foot pounds (ft lbf), which is too much for a young boy. While the .45 LC is in the 460 to 1,200 ft lbf range, the .22 LR in the 100 to 200 ft lbf, with the M9 19 mm at 384 to 500 ft lbf, and the .30 Carbine at 970 ft lbfs. The energy varies with the type of load. Where a ten year old can handle the under 1,000 ft lbf weapons he'd have big issues with the over 2,000 ft lbf weapons, so they get lower power weapons to fit their intended range and targets. Also a .22 LR Hollow Point does have the capability to kill a person with a shot to most vulnerable areas.

Maturity: A person's maturity is will depend on their personality and how they're raised. I've known many ten year olds as mature, or more mature, than Pat is in the story. This is especially true of those raised on rural farms or military bases.

Out of Reach:

Double Beds: Here in Australia we have three sizes of double beds - Standard double bed, Queen size double bed, and King size double bed. In general, we call all of them a double bed, except when ordering a new mattress or sheet for them.

The Contagion:

Anti-biotics: This term is used in two ways. One is in regards to the commercial products for sale, these are designed to target specific biological infections, and not a virus. In general scientific research anti-biotics is used to refer to any chemical or biological agent used to fight or destroy something biological, and includes more than the commercial formulas just mentioned. This wider use of the term is what I have in the story. Which is now revised to show that more clearly.

Cheyenne Mountain Complex: The facility entrance is part way up a high mountain and visible from a number of areas where a line of sight is available over a lower ridge and along the roadway. Access is along Norad Road and Google Maps shows Norad Road takes a large hook left up through a valley before it reaches the lower car-park for the facility and then continues along the valley to the upper car-park at the top of a steep slope. The valley where the road takes that major curve is a good spot to set up a barricade, and what I refer to.

Star Performance:

Had an unexpected question about poppers of fruit juice see:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Juicebox_%28container%29

Life is Change

Georgia Gun laws: Smoky doesn't have a residential address when he applies for the permit, and he wants a concealed carry permit. So, please, no more emails about how legal open carry is in Georgia.

As to the cut down shotgun, the advice I got from a Georgia gunsmith was that being a single shot weapon in a pistol style with a barrel under 6 inches made it a large bore pistol and not a short barrel shotgun. I've since confirmed that advice was based on Georgia law. I've also been advised by the ATF an application for such a weapon can be made under the National Fire Arms Act. I would have thought where Smoky asked to check if it was legal would have covered that for most people, however, I'm revising the story to add a note about them getting the NFA paperwork done and approved.

Always a Marine:

Uniforms and the Three Cartridges: Please read the third paragraph of the funeral carefully, the only uniform I mention the colour of is that of the Marine Corps League, which is a red coat, and they provide the Honour Guard, not the serving Marines. Thank you to those who found someone to ask about the three cartridges, and for passing the information on to me. Three sources checked with senior NCOs in their local military and they signify - Honour, Country, and Duty.

Rough Diamond:

The IRS: is concerned about the taxes being paid. Once they find the money is going to the company, they concentrate efforts on the company, to ensure they're paying the right taxes. Once that's resolved, they walk away - their only concern is tax revenue. They're unlikely to be investigating Anian himself, or look at his actual age as he won't have a Social Security Number as he's a legal foreigner and it's not his taxes they're looking at until the end of the tax year and he lodges a return.

The Casinos: my research shows the Indian Casinos, which are what Anian deals with in New Mexico, do NOT operate the same way as the big commercial ones in Las Vegas etc., they're less likely to be quick in banning people and the like behaviour. I make a point of his mentioning being connected with The Spirits and how some of the Indian staff connect with this too. This is another reason why they won't be so quick to kick him out and be prepared to put up with him once he places limits on his activities, that and his big tips. OK, I may be a bit out in the reality of the situation as I didn't have an opportunity to talk to the actual casino staff about this, but it's a very reasonable premises to go with.

I hope you pay close attention to the very last sentence of the story as it applies to all politicians and government employees, domestic and otherwise.

Times of Old:

Here in Australia I was taught by a carpenter to call the cut a rebate. In the US most seem to call the same thing a rabbet - the wiki article on a Dado joints calls it both, amongst other things.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dado_%28joinery%29

I've had a few emails where people say I should credit cmsix.

First, yes, I'm aware of his writing and make an oblique reference to one of his works early on in Times of Old.

Second, cmsix did NOT create this genre and he was far from my first introduction to aliens and time travel. The first story I read along these lines was back in the 1970s and was in an old pulp fiction paperback. At SOL I first read time travel stories by authors like aubie 56, The Scot, Jim War, and Old Guy before I found cmsix's works. Some of those pre-date the stories cmsix has on SOL. His big one, John and Argent seems to have been written in 2005 or 2006, from what I can find on the Internet, well after I had read stories by others. So please stop saying I should credit him for the idea, as it was around before him.

Early dialogues with the aliens: Ed thought he was going to die and is surprised not to be dead. Then he's hit with the idea about being the main star in a survival show. He realises they can just eliminate him if he disagrees, so he takes the job on. No need for a serious discussion at all and he's also still a bit shocked by the situation. I defy anyone to be anything but a little flippant in that situation.

Weapons and the Wagons: About them being useless after a few decades and Ed should take books, information, paper and printing presses. I need only say: Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs - which I've applied to the story. Ed is a guy wanting to stay alive, not an evangelistic scientist on a quest to change the world by taking a hundred tons of gear with him.

He first ensures his survival; designer cave to live in, armoured clothing, guns to survive a major attack, a show and tell manual on medicine and the local herbs, (think of these as insurance) then standard weapons of the era to hunt and survive normal attacks, basic tools and seed to convert from a hunter gatherer lifestyle to an agricultural one, salt and cooking gear to get an in with the locals, finally a wagon and horsepower to move it all to his living area. He also gets the knowledge to talk to the locals.

For those who've not studied it, no culture can develop and sustain metalworking and metal based tools or implements until AFTER they've developed a decent agricultural lifestyle that enables them enough people to be free to concentrate on such activities as mining, smelting, and blacksmithing. No one person can do all that themselves, and it takes one hell of an infrastructure behind the society to do it - an infrastructure that would take decades or lifetimes to develop from a hunter gather society, no matter how smart and knowledgeable the leaders are.

Ed has to move the society along at a sane pace they can absorb and change to, one step at a time. Which is why the book on tools he asked for and why the focus on woodworking tools. Yes he cheats and gets long lasting high quality metal ones to start with, but all are tools that can be duplicated from within the available materials and technology of the era. The only thing he has that can't are the guns, and he doesn't want them to be available to anyone else, anyway.

In short, Ed's approach is to improve the life of the people and advance towards civilisation, but at a rate they can handle and sustain, not huge unsupported leaps of tech that can't be sustained.

My Writing Style and General Comments - updated March 2017

March 11, 2017
Posted at 5:45 pm
 

Watch my blog as I only say things here about the stories here, and give alerts on new stories as well.

Oh, to me email, phone, snail mail, and face to face calls are social media, but Twitter, Facebook, LinkedIn, Google+ and other such stuff are data mining SPAM sites that I don't use; so please don't send me any invites to such places.

Thank you for reading my stories. I do many things to put food on the table and deal with life, this interferes with my writing, so please bear with me when there are delays in stories appearing. I do NOT post a story until it's complete. Once posting has started I'll make changes to deal with typographical, spelling, continuity, or other important errors like copyright infringement when someone points one out to me. If you see an error, and not just a UK / USA spelling difference error, please let me know.

Writing: I write as if I'm telling the story while sitting around a fire. I find the use of present tense adds to the feeling of being involved, but don't do this with all my stories. Most authors write in the past tense, as it's easier that way to use only one tense throughout. In the present tense you sometimes have to refer to prior events in the past tense, and use both tenses as is appropriate for the situation. I often write in the first person, as this adds to the sense of being involved too. These are both valid, if not common, ways to write. Please, Anonymous, no more emails about it being the wrong way to write.

Aussie narrators use Aussie terms, so please keep that in mind, despite where the story is set. I use Aussie narrators for most of my stories, so, please, no emails about that.

Headings: I use colour codes to indicate headings for Chapters (red), Sub-chapters (blue), and Sections (bold black). They're centred, look more colourful, and are easier to locate. My chapters do NOT match what FS calls a chapter, and I list the FS chapter numbers as Parts (green) in my Table of Contents. The submission wizard gets temperamental if the files are too big and makes them into multiple pages. So I try to match my chapter / sub-chapter ends with the number of characters the wizard is happy with - but not always as sometimes I just have to go past the magic number. Once the first part is showing the rest will be appearing every other day. If you can't wait to finish it you can always get it from my Lulu web site (listed below) while contributing to my welfare fund.

Sequels: I do plan to do a sequel to Rough Diamond, Star Performance, the Al Adams stories (on Earth and Chaos), Kim:Power Play, Odd Man in College, and others. I also have many works in progress to finish, so don't hold your breath. Just watch out for the new stories and enjoy them as they appear. They are planned out, but I need to do some research before writing them, watch here for the announcement of when they go up.

EMAILS: I reply to all emails from valid reply to addresses. However, some block emails from my ISP on an irregular basis - clients of those ISPs who don't get a reply, talk to your ISP about it. To get around this I'm using gmail to reply, but this takes more work by me, so I'm now doing email replies every six to eight weeks.

Thanks to the anonymous feedback email senders who send a smiley or a thanks for each chapter. You more than make up for the anonymous abusive ones. Please don't get offended if I don't respond to a basic 'thanks' email immediately.

I'm an Aussie and have never been to the USA in real life, all the knowledge comes from Internet research. So anyone who wishes to give me advice on such things is welcome to send me some information and ideas so I can incorporate them into stories. Please note that in doing so you give me the legal right to use that idea free of charge.

I write as both Ernest Bywater and Ernest Edwards (the Clan Amir series) and I also have my stories at Lulu - page link below.

All my stories are available as e-pub downloads or print books via Lulu. The stories are written in a 6 x 9 inch paperback format page using Libre Office and saved as .odt files then converted to HTML files for here. Note: I've been revising my works to make them smoother flowing and easier to read. If you've bought a past copy and the Lulu page shows a copy with an edition date before July 2016 and you'd like an updated copy, email me with some sort evidence you have a purchased copy and the format you want (epub or pdf), and I'll send you a copy of the latest version. The latest versions are being posted here as well.

www.lulu.com/spotlight/ernestbywater

If you think a story of mine is worth publishing in your local newspaper or magazine, talk to them and have them email me. I'll gladly give them approval to reprint it free, especially for Always a Marine and Coming Home.

What is a Ute?

I've had people asking: what is a ute? It's the short form of utility vehicle, but is a specific type of vehicle here in Australia and has had the meaning expanded a bit. This wikipedia page gives the basics:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ute_%28vehicle%29

A close US equivalent (as reported by a US reader).

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chevrolet_El_Camino

The most common form is a sedan type vehicle front with an integrated bed, kind of like a normal sedan version of the US pick-up truck. Today it's been expanded to include most 1 tonne vehicles used on a rural property, like the typical US pick-up truck, and even a flat-bed tray style 1 tonne truck.

Chips!

Here in Australia chips are bits of hot fried potato. Due to certain US fast food stores doing business here we sometimes call the very thin cut ones French Fries (some people call them shoe strings fries). We also have potato crisps, these are cold, precooked, and in packets from companies like Smiths; sometimes they are called a packet of chips. Chips are hot and eaten with meals or as a snack or meal of their own, crisps are a small snack and never eaten with a meal.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/French_fries

Figures in conversation - especially money.

A common verbal short-cut is to mention the baseline of figures the first time you speak of the figure and then only talk of what's in front of the baseline. Example: "I got a budget of a hundred million bucks, the first ten is for the new building, thirty for operating costs ..." and so on. This is to save saying the million or thousand or grand several times.

Plan Images I've had people ask about plans of places I design and use in my stories. High quality images of them are on DropBox. Within the folder is a folder for each story, and you can open it to see the images for the story you're reading. Be warned, I'm putting images up as I create them, so there may be some for stories not yet finished, so don't get upset when you don't recognise the folder, you will, when it's finished. Although I tried, some aren't to scale, due my system's limitations. The URL is:

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/ebk8ve052m0c1rs/AACohN7e_x8OuRFrn0EbQ2L6a?dl=0

Clan Amir Stories as Ernest Edwards

February 28, 2017
Posted at 8:28 pm
Updated: March 13, 2017 - 11:51 pm
 

Many of you know I've never hidden the fact my real name is Ernest Bywater and I write the Clan Amir stories as Ernest Edwards because they were originally published with an Irish publisher and he wanted them under a different name to what he already had some of my stories by. Thus the different name. To simplify things a great deal I'm now having all the stories I own the copyright for moved under the banner of Ernest Bywater.

All the Clan Amir stories are posted in chronological order except The Amazing Amy, because it doesn't fit the site rules, sorry. Please read the entries with the background information and the time-line for the series. These have the code sequence 00-xx.

The series was originally written as a mix of seven books, some short stories, some novellas, and some novels. The anthologies of two thick books on Lulu are in chronological order within the book, but the stories in The Falcon fit in between the stories Darmore Demon and The Shukra War in the book The Berant - U MAMA Wars. All the stories her on FS are in chronological order and are coded into their books with the sequence Book-Position, thus 03-03 Raptor Games is the third book-third story, while 04 The Day of Blood is the fourth book and a full novel.

My Life and Writing update as of 25 January 2017

January 24, 2017
Posted at 9:18 pm
 

First, please do not send emails asking about the next story or how I'm going, I don't have the time or energy to deal with them right now. My life is still in major turmoil, and has been since late July 2015 when the Police came in with a search warrant and walked off with every modern computing device in the house, including my phone, my son's phone, and the back-up copies of all my work. At the time they said it would take them 2 to 3 months to check everything and give it back. After four months I found out they'd done nothing about it. We did get our phones back after a call to the Local Area Commander to do some tree shaking on the safety factors because we live in a remote area.

The effect is I do not have my copies of the 30 plus stories I was working on or any of the research for them. So all those half written sequels are delayed until I get the files back. I can't even deal with the emails that were outstanding at that time, nor do I have anyone's email address, unless they emailed me since August 2015.

The whole matter is very stressful because my son has a mental health issue which means he has problems with any change and can't handle any stress. Keeping him calm has also been adding to my stress levels. I am writing when I'm up to it. But a lot of time is taken up with dealing with this problem

Since July I've found out the government made a change to certain laws and never made a public announcement about the changes, despite the significant change in the law. The change also had the effect of being retroactive, which is not supposed to be possible. I now have to wait until the police get their act together and confirm I do not create or publish unlawful works.

In May 2016 they returned 25 items, most of them simple things like USB sound cards and unused SD cards. There's still 3 laptop computer two stacks of CDs/DVDs, and 8 print books they've not checked yet. They've checked and cleared over seven millions files they refuse to give back to me or make any copies of anything to give to me. No copies of emails, work files, tax records, or stories I was working on. There are two court cases on this, at this time, one of which is about the checking and return of materials to go before the court again in March, and the other is back in May. There is a subpoena for certain information I want for the police they were supposed to provide in early January 2017, but have twice asked for a delay because they're having trouble getting the information together. This relates to the second court case due back before the court in May, and I've instructed the lawyer to let the court know we'll need three of four months to analyze the information from the police before we can go back to court, which is due back in May, at this time. Thus the police delays should result in a further delay to that court case.

So far this matter has cost us all our saving for 5 years to be able to get back to close to normal day to day operations of everything except this issue and the related stress affecting our time and health. I have started a number of new stories and have about 20 stories I'm working on as the muse moves me and I have time to work on them.

Please, no more emails on this matter about these officious zealots looking to prove I'm something I'm not.